I am currently an undergraduate in the National University of Singapore (NUS), pursuing a degree in the Bachelor of Science (Chemistry). Besides majoring in chemistry, I have pursued a minor in Technopreneurship.
My interest in science was recognized since my secondary school days and my enduring interest in this field concurs with my inquisitive and evaluative nature. Apart from the knowledge and skills obtained during my course of study, I have become more analytical and logical in my mentality which is evident in my improved competence in handling problems and difficulties.
My decision to pursue a minor in Technopreneurship was motivated by my keen interest in entrepreneurship. The technopreneurship modules have broadened my knowledge and perspective while at the same time cultivating a business sense in me. The projects assigned required students to interact with professionals in the working industry and to submit business plans and reports which was definitely a valuable development process.
During my co-curriculum activities, I have taken on roles as a leader and member which gave me great opportunities to develop invaluable qualities in me such as leadership, teamwork and management skills. I have also realized I am rather personable as I do enjoy interacting with people and easily build rapport with people around me. As much as I do enjoy the company of people, I am glad to know that my company is valued by the people around me too.
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Dear Terrence,
ReplyDeleteI remember that you are applying for the post of a sales executive in a MNC firm during last week "mock" interview. After reading your biodata,i feel that you do have the qualifications to succeed in this field. Your chemistry background would greatly help in your understanding of the drugs that you are promoting. Besides, the modules that you have taken during your minor in Technopreneurship have developed your business acumen and have provided you adequate opportunities to interact with working professionals. These valuable experience will probably be useful when you are making sale pitches and presentations to your potential clients. Futhermore, other interpersonal qualities such as leadership, teamwork and management skills that you learn during your co-curriculum activities will probably make you a better sale executive. I do hope you can succeed in this job application.
Thanks for the post, Terence. It's quite informative, but it sounds a bit stilted. There are a few areas that sound strange to me. One is this:
ReplyDelete"My interest in science was recognized since my secondary school...."
Recognized by whom? If by you, I'd use the active voice: "I developed an interest in science from...."
If by someone else, then I would state that (but I doubt that's what you meant).
Here's another example: "The technopreneurship modules have broadened my knowledge and perspective while at the same time cultivating a business sense in me."
That "cultivating a business sense in me" seems to be overly formal. Try "enhancing my business sense."
The other issue is one of punctuation:
I have become more analytical and logical in my mentality (insert a comma) which is evident in my improved competence in handling problems and difficulties.
Why? Well, that's a good question to ask the next time in class.
Hey Terence,
ReplyDeleteI think any science major who is willing to take up another minor to enrich their lives and strengthen their academic qualifications should be respected! How do you manage your time?!
I'm curious to know what activities you joined that gave you the opportunity to develop your leadership, teamwork, and management skills! Maybe you can include some significant examples in your next biodata?
I also realize that you're quite a fan of the colour pink, judging from what you wear to class everytime I see you. Don't get too freaked out if you think I'm checking you out! I'm just making an observation.
CK
Hi,
ReplyDeleteThanks Terry for your very encouraging comments.
Sir, thanks for the feedback, would make the necessary changes. Regarding your last comment,
Me: "I have become more analytical and logical in my mentality (insert a comma) which is evident in my improved competence in handling problems and difficulties".
You: "Why? Well, that's a good question to ask the next time in class"
Do you think the phrasing is not appropriate?
Thanks all for the time and effort.
Hi Chee Kiang,
ReplyDeleteFirstly, I must say that I am no superman and even though it is tough, it is still manageable. I am sure you would have been able to do it too. I guess because it is not a common option, you were misled to think it is an arduous task. Very importantly, it is the interest that would motivate you to overcome the difficulties.
Regarding the activities that enabled me to develop leadership, teamwork, and management skills, I was a vice-captain for a soccer club. I would not say I am proficient in the skills mentioned, but I was given opportunities to develop them. You know we have to market ourselves to some extend in our resumes, hopefully it is not done out of proportion here. Ha
Anyway regarding your observation of my liking to the colour pink, I am fine with pink but not exactly a fan. Don't worry, I have noticed the picture of you and your girlfriend and know that you are just as normal as I am. Unless that picture is just a decoil. haha
See you around men.
As a rule, adjective clauses of the "which/where" type will be set apart in commas when the info is not absolutely needed for one's understanding of the main clause.
ReplyDeleteFor example: The town where I was born, which is in north Texas, was at one time famous for its massive air force base.
Do you see how the first adj clause -- where I was born -- is vital to understanding WHICH town was famous for its base. The other clause -- which in in north Texas -- is extra info, and so it needs to be set apart by commas.
Thanks for reviewing this.
Hi Sir,
ReplyDeleteI roughly understand what you mean. Will clarify with you in class.
Thank you for your time and effort.
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ReplyDeleteI think you did a good job in describing what kind of benefit you got from the major and minor you have been studying. Maybe, as Chee Kiang said, it will be better if you include the significant exmaples in this biodata.
ReplyDeleteIn my opinion, your organization of paragraphs is good. You have divided your work into different layers and analyzed and showed what you have learnt from each experience. It makes the post easy to read and understand for me.
Thanks Min Khine for your comments, would bear in mind your suggestions. Al the best to you and see you around.
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